In response, readers had a few comments. Eva said:
You know, I don't know that I 100% agree with you. When I encounter that mid sentence POV switch, it throws me out of the story. Now, if you want to move to Henry's point of view after Marge has had her say, well then, that's clearer. For example, she throws him out and closes the door on him--what are his thoughts on the other side of the door.It's true, Eva, that that is a more traditional way that we've seen point of view treated, in most of the things we read. It can work well because we are familiar with that: a scene ends, and then the next scene is up for grabs. It could be from the same person's perspective, but it would be fine and not confusing for it to be from someone else's perspective.
I'm just warning against that kind of choice because it is so expected that it begins to seem very consciously done. The best writing doesn't show the seams of its construction; that very convenient switch of p.o.v. can seem like the writer was doing it inorganically. Let the story flow naturally, says I!
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